Anna Kay hathon mai palne walay
Hazzar chehray
K jin kay lehjon mai
Raqs karti khudi ki lau nay
Najanay kitnay hi aashiyaanay
Jala diye hain
Mager ye phir bhi
Khudi k aasaib ko dilon say Bedakhl karne ka hoslaa
Kho chukay hain....
Or inki qismat mai
Jal k bujhna bujh k jalna hi
Likh dia hay....
Koi to ho jo inhain btaey
Anna ki iss khu'n raiz Jung mai
Shikast inki hi muntazir hay...
Mohabaton k haseen gulshan mai
Apni " main " ko jo seenchta hay
Kisi bhi soorat
Zameen usko qabool karne say munharif hay
K uska muskan na aasman pe na is zameen pe kahin nahi hay
Ke ye " khuddi " bemaaeni hay..
(AB)
11 comments:
bohat aala ... aap ne likha hai ?
Thanks a lot for liking by the way... :)
Jee ali ye mai ne likhi hay...I think you missed my last three poems also...read and share ur thoughts.... Mohabat khwaab hoti hay, suno Jana , dil e muztarib..
neechay shayara ka naam likh dia karain ta k pata chal jaye :)
teeno main se sab se achi Dil e Muztarib lagi .. andaz e bayan khoob hai
suno janaa bhi bohat aala hai ... 'mohabbat khwaab..' bhi achi hai lekin personally mujhe sad shayari itni pasand nhi is liye pehla half ziada acha laga :)
achi khaasi shayara ho aap. majmua e kalaam kab chap raha hai ?
Bohat shukria perhne or pasand karne ka....bus achi shaira abhi abhi hoi hon majmooa e kalaam ki 4 nazmain to ho gai hain bus thora hi time hay publish hone mai :P
Wah
The Nest ....glad you like it. :)
Well... though the poem itself is written very good yet I tend to disagree with the subject.
Anaa and Khudi are absolutely not same. While Anaa (ego) inclined towards a negative characteristic, Khudi is a must-have for a respectable human being. To say short, khudi is self awareness resulting in self respect within own self and selflessness in front of beloved (Lord). On the other hand, anaa (ego) is somehow self deception if crosses the limit.
Arguments are welcome :)
No arguments...infact I welcome you to suggest me some words to replace this "khudi" .... In poetry balancing I couldn't find something rhyming and suitable word for specific lines .... Please it would be an honer for me if You correct my mistakes... :)
I think I should give a caption above this poem that "year Allama Iqbal wali khudi nahi hay" :))
Well..some people are just disappeared after there opinions... And I am still waiting for good suggestions.. :) :) :)
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